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[xXLoverXx]

You're my angel

Strophe 1:

When I saw you the First time,My Heart beated faster.

I hoped you will be mine,

Because I love you so!

Strophe 2:

If somebody hurt you

I am justify

And I will hold you in my arms

If you have to cry

Refrain:

Because your my angel

I love you so much

Every time I implode

When we touch

And I'll never leave you

No matter what happens

And that is true

I fight for you with all weapons

Then you came over me

And I get embarrassed

A voice in my had said

I only want she

Because your my angel

I love you so much

Every time I implode

When we touch

And I'll never leave you

No matter what happens

And that is true

I fight for you with all weapons

And one year later

I 'm toghether with you

I feel so happy....

.... because my dreams comes true.

Wollte wissen wie ihr mein Lied so findet, freue mich auf Tips und Bewertungen!!

 

[alena]

süß!

Darf ich dir ein paar englische Patzer verbessern???

"When I saw you the first time, my heart beat faster (Beat ist ein irregular verb),

I hoped you would be mine (sollte im konjuktiv geschrieben sein, da Vergangenheit)

because I loved you so (bleib in der Vergangenheit)

If somebody hurt you,

- I am Justify - den Teil verstehe ich nicht???? "I would...xy"

And I would hold you in my arms

If you had to cry

Because You're my angel (von you are)

I love you so much

Everytime I implode

when we touch

And I will never leave you,

whatever happens / no matter what happens

And that is true

I'd fight four you with all (my) weapons (I would fight ist wohl das was du sagen willst und nicht nur ich kämpfe)

And then you came over me (was willst du damit sagen`???)

And I got (Vergangenheit!) embarrassed

A voice in my head said

All I want is her! (alles was ich will, ist sie!)

because you're my angel

I love you so much

Every time I implode

when we touch

and I'll never leave you

no matter what will be

And this is true

I'd fight for you with all I've got / (my) weapons

And one year later

you're by my side

I feel so happy

because my dream(s) came true (Vergangenheitsform)

 

[xXLoverXx]

alena vielen Dank für deine Tipps.

Ich werde das direkt übernehmen danke

 

[Immortal Love]

Ich finde den Text echt gut, würde es aber gern mal hören, weil ich ja die Melodie nicht kenn.

Für wen hast du denn dieses Lied geschrieben?

Jedenfalls find ich es gut!